Reviews

[Drag]

Well, I know Winduril is doing the weekly reviews and all. However, I thought it would be nice to have a general review/comment section that anyone could post in. So he said I could go ahead as long as it was open to everyone.

You have any reviews/comments you want to give(writer or not)? Would you like to request any reviews/comments? Are you interested in writing something and simply asking for help/assistance? Please, feel free do to any of those things. Howeve.r no matter what you do please try to keep comments(positive or negative) as unoffending as possible.

On that note, I would like any comments on my story (what you liked, what I could do better, blah, blah). Also, if anyone wants I can review/comment on your work to the best of my knowledge.

[TheRisingSun]

Sup drag... i really enjoyed your writeing. And you used alot of history... im impressed, ill admit i try to avoid time lines as ill usually make a mistake...

Loved the flashback *thumbs up on that*

How'd I do everyone... Id like some tips cus i only have writtin for about 5 months now... :o

[Ouchy]

Yeah, plus maybe Windy could give a fan-favorite bonus. All the players vote their favorite volume for the week and whoever gets the most votes gets bonus points.

But I like the idea of us reviewing other chapters. More interactive like.

I have one small critisicm for many of the players here. I liked reading and would read almost anything I can find. But reading some of the chapters are very difficult. My advice: Use proper spacing! Nothing is harder to read than the one long block of words. Paragraph liberally. It's a lot easier on the eyes.

Other than that, I like. All these stories with their intrigue and whatnot fascinates me. It's very fun. :)

[Drag]

Cool idea, Ouchy...may make things more interesting.

I would say I've also enjoyed quite a few stories, some for the comedy others for the character description.

The main problem are have right now is with spacing. Though in-part the forum's fault it would be cool if people focused on that. And like Ouchy said use more paragraphs, probably separating them every 4-8 sentences depending on length.

[tengen]

shouldn't we double-space on new paragraphs?

i have to say is, proofread your story, and run it through the spellcheck.

[Windúril]

Yeah, plus maybe Windy could give a fan-favorite bonus. All the players vote their favorite volume for the week and whoever gets the most votes gets bonus points.

But I like the idea of us reviewing other chapters. More interactive like.

I have one small critisicm for many of the players here. I liked reading and would read almost anything I can find. But reading some of the chapters are very difficult. My advice: Use proper spacing! Nothing is harder to read than the one long block of words. Paragraph liberally. It's a lot easier on the eyes.

Other than that, I like. All these stories with their intrigue and whatnot fascinates me. It's very fun. :)

I like that idea. It won't happen this week though...still a bit too disorganized. I'll start it next week.

[GeN]

It hasn't been up long, but after reading my story posted I'm a little disappointed. Near the end it seems like I rushed through things. I feel like I didn't describe enough of the situations near the end and that takes away from the story. Maybe it's because I'm nervous. What does everyone else think? I'll try a lot harder on the next one. This was the first time I've ever RP'd like this.

[Drag]

It hasn't been up long, but after reading my story posted I'm a little disappointed. Near the end it seems like I rushed through things. I feel like I didn't describe enough of the situations near the end and that takes away from the story. Maybe it's because I'm nervous. What does everyone else think? I'll try a lot harder on the next one. This was the first time I've ever RP'd like this.

I'll check it out, though I may not post my opinion until tomorrow. I may go to sleep soon.

[TheRisingSun]

its not bad Gen personally i think its way better then my stuff.

Oh ya chap three is up me and darkprophet co-op a hollow fight give it a review.

[Drag]

its not bad Gen personally i think its way better then my stuff.

Oh ya chap three is up me and darkprophet co-op a hollow fight give it a review.

I read you chapter and I must say I did find it enjoyable. There were a few typos here and there but no big deal.

The main problem I think was the forum's censorship really cause breaks in your story, so you may try revising some of the swear so it flows a little better.

I thought it was fun...and you and DP had that Expert/Rookie thing going on, though I wished DP's character would have did a little more (his character spend most of the time playing damsel in distress I think) I thought it was funny how you developed special moves and all too. The fight was also pretty nice. Overall, entertaining chapter.

[TheRisingSun]

I read you chapter and I must say I did find it enjoyable. There were a few typos here and there but no big deal.

The main problem I think was the forum's censorship really cause breaks in your story, so you may try revising some of the swear so it flows a little better.

I thought it was fun...and you and DP had that Expert/Rookie thing going on, though I wished DP's character would have did a little more (his character spend most of the time playing damsel in distress I think) I thought it was funny how you developed special moves and all too. The fight was also pretty nice. Overall, entertaining chapter.

Yea censorship sucks... o well cant say da.mn anyway...

he actually wanted to do that Expert Rookie thing... cus he said his sword is not that good but mine was better... though he was better at kidou, he wanted to try and use a sword. so he figured hed play it to get us f'ed up a bit before he realized im the sword hes the spells :D

[Windúril]

Djudge's introduction chapter was good stuff. Introductions don't come much better.

[Drag]

Yeah quite good, though I did get lose at times.

I will say though, Ouchy, your newest chapter is quite good. I really liked your hollow in that one.

[Ouchy]

Thanks! I have a new chapter just in and I'm done for this week.

As an aside: Does anyone here think I write too much in one chapter. I swear, if I wanted to I could've squeezed them out to at least 2 more chapters...

[Drag]

Thanks! I have a new chapter just in and I'm done for this week.

As an aside: Does anyone here think I write too much in one chapter. I swear, if I wanted to I could've squeezed them out to at least 2 more chapters...

I don't think you write to much...Pretty average lenght to me.

[Windúril]

The length is fine. It's around what I was seeing at my other RPG a couple years ago.

[Drag]

I wanted to have any opinions on my fight scene with Kaloo, its my first one so I'm not to comfortable with it too much as if yet.

I wanted to know what others felt.

[spaced_out]

i gotta say, i loved Saint's depicition of Diega's zanpakuto manifestation
great new chapter

[♠ Saint ♠]

Thanks spaced_out! ^^ I'm already hacking away at the next chapter. ^^

[TheRisingSun]

Oh yea and since this is the place to review id just like to say to saint and drag

wow....

I liked both of your ShiKai they are just amazing.

[Ouchy]

Oh yea and since this is the place to review id just like to say to saint and drag

wow....

I liked both of your ShiKai they are just amazing.
I second that.

[Drag]

I just wanted to comment on an overall good start to Vol. 3. Keep up the good work guys.

[Tsuyomi Tatsumaki]

If anyone has an opinion on my stuff as its been released so far, I wouldn't mind hearing it.