[Third Division][Week 26][Katsuro's Application]

[Katsuro]

Application For [Halcyon Days] Bleach RP

AIM Contact: MatsukataKatsuro
Email: MatsukataKatsuro@mac.com

Race: Shinigami Division: Third Division
Name: Matsukata, Katsuro Age: 115

Persona: Katsuro is an even-tempered man who believes in reason, and in behavior befitting the situation in which one finds oneself. In order to achieve this ideal, Katsuro seeks a balance of the various aspects of his personality; the ability to be compassionate towards friends, and to be ruthless towards enemies. He is driven in his duties as a shinigami by his unwavering belief in the righteousness of the path of a soul reaper. He is motivated to defeat hollows not by a desire to eliminate suffering, but instead by a profound respect for the necessity of ensuring that souls move through the cycle of rebirth.
Biography: Katsuro was born to a noble family of pureblood shinigami, and grew up in Seireitei, within the walls of his family’s estate. He is a pure soul – one who has never lived; never set foot on Earth. For this reason Katsuro is obsessed with the living world, and with defending it. Not only has he not set foot on Earth, but he also never ventured outside the walls of his family’s estate until joining the academy. His entire life in soul society had been spent there, living a contemplative and meditative life, and undergoing education in philosophy, music, ethics, combat, and history.
Physical Stature: Katsuro is a tall, sleekly muscular man, with sharp and handsome features capable of exhibiting both kindness and cruelty. His movements equally display grace, power, and agility. He wears a standard shihakusho in the ordinary fashion, without modification or contrivance. His gleaming black hair is perfectly straight and immaculately combed. It is exceedingly long, flowing smoothly down his back as far as his waist. In the front it is swept across from right to left, and obscures that side of his face.

Division: Katsuro sought to join the Third Division because he wanted to be on the front lines; sent into battle at a moments notice to defend the living world from troublesome hollows. He feels a deep fellowship with his comrades in the third division because of his belief in the importance of a shinigami’s work, and values the personal connections he shares with them above almost everything.
Zanpakuto: Katsuro carries an unremarkable, standard issue zanpakuto, in the customary fashion at his left side. However, if one looks closely, they can see a simple, but finely crafted wooden flute tucked into his obi, accompanying his zanpakuto. The appearance of the flute mimics that of his zanpakuto’s sheath.
Stats:
Reiatsu: 100
Zanjutsu: 25
Hakuda: 25
Hohou: 25
Kidou: 25
Connection: 0

[Kawazoe]

Most of your application looks fine except for a few spelling errors here and there.

But the most glaring error would have to be the lack of a sample chapter; you need to have this in here before you can get considered for approval at all.

EDIT: Ok, I read over your introduction. That's fine; it's important to ensure that your chapter is over 1,000 words though.

It sounds like you've read over all the rules.

[Katsuro]

Yes, as I said in my introduction post, I plan to add the sample chapter later. I will probably write it tomorrow. I was hoping to get an initial reaction on the character concept first. Thanks for putting in an appearance in my thread. :)

[louhi]

heyhey~ just a few quick comments for things that i thought need clearing up;

space out your sections a bit more, they're running all together @___@ thanks. haha

i like the character concept overall, it's quite different from what we usually get and.. rather suited to being in the gotei, really!

I'm a little confused by him never having left his estate at all - he would have at least had to leave to go to the academy, wouldn't he? When you're accepted to the rp, your character will be at the point where he's just joined one of the divisions, however you're free to write chapters and such about his experience in the academy too if you want. :3

you might have noticed we have a system ---> click here (http://bleachforums.com/showthread.php?t=24223) for nobility in the RP, just so everyone knows who everyone is. Once you're accepted, you'll have to make a small write-up for your noble house which from your profile i'd guess would be a low nobility family with land in seireitei, and submit that write-up to Darktoaster (moots), so it can be included in the thread too and make your family 'official' and whatnot.

thats all for now, til you get your sample chapter up. have fun, and good luck! :3


-louhi-

[IshinOnigami]

hey there. My name is Ishin, and i am a Application staffer, or app staff for short, here at Halcyon Days. First off, i would like to say Welcome to the RP. Now lets get down to business shall we?

Name- LOL. Is it bad that teh first thing i did was pull a yachiru and nickname you katkat in my head? I like it. It seems to flow. Very feng shui.....or whatever way ya spell it.

Age- Fine, though how old does he look? It usually helps to put that up there. guess ill just have to wait till phys. descrption.... ;_;

persona- hmmm..seems wordy. I this is going to sound weird, but you stated his veiws on things, what about other things. Behavior is what we mainly want here. I like the way it sounds, but it seems.....hard to form a actor in my head, which is what i usually try to do.

Biography- Hmm. This i like. Aside from getting our GM to approve your Noble House, i think this is quite good. I get the feeling that you could use that for some great collabs and chapters as well. Always remember your roots when writing. Especially if you wanted to do a chapter perhaps describing to an NPC the nature of the noble house.....

Physical Description- Awww. I feel a little disappointed. Not at the description, because that is perfect. I see him in my head riht away. no, i got disappointed that ou never told us how old he seems to be. i feel betrayed. LOL. anyway, good job on the description.

Division- That works fine. You didnt have to go into that long winded explanation, but whatever you want. Dont forget to put in the header that you are unseated in your division.

Zanpakutou- it is fine. Though, you do have me intrigued by the flute. I think you could make a cool shikai if you followed the them you got there. Just a thought.

Stats- Balanced build, eh? Just remember, being a jack-of-all-trades makes you a master of none. An idea, because you are in teh blitzkreig stike force division, you might think aboout cutting down one combat stat and beefing up your speed. Just a thought.

Also, listen to louhi. You should space them out more. Put a space in between each paragraph. It makes reading much easier.

anyway, thats as far as i can get for now. I need to see a sample chapter to get a better hold on your character. Once you get that up ill see how it looks. But for the record, i have a good idea of your character and it sounds really good, so keep up the work.

PS: I just need to say this. Check your spelling in a couple of places, run it through a spell check, and also check grammar. I didn't see anything pop out at me, but i am only human, so it might help to catch them beforethey happen.

[Okashii]

Haha yay! Another 3rd Division join. Good to have you with us here at the RP.